What do you all think, about my terrible rhyming poem...quiet elementary my dear watson!

"Trapped"

Devoid of life
Devoid of tears
He views his life
As wasted years

Devoid of faith
He spirals down
He'll lift you up
Then drag you down

He'll set you free
From deep inside
But all he is
is full of lies

He'll burn you up
Set you ablaze
He'll fill your soul
Then leave you dazed

He looks just like
all you'll ever need
your want of him
will be pure greed

he'll stitch you up
he'll break you down
rip up your heart
act like a clown

he'll smile at you
when you're in need
he'll sit and laugh
and watch you bleed

you'll see in him
all he could be
you'll walk away
you'll have to leave

you gave him love
and so much more
he'll bring you pain
even the score

you'll love him till
the day you die
he'll laugh at you
and ask you why

you'll sit and dwell
in all your tears
all he knows of love
is full of fear

he'll never change
as time goes by
you'll see him there
just that same guy

always the same
he'll fade away
but in your heart
he will remain


you'll fade away
he fated you
he brought you down
now you're trapped too


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by: ME

go find a corner and cry it in.

Go find the right forum and post in it. (sorry)

But in all seriousness, it seems really cliche. It's like the poem you read on the back of every goth teens algebra notebook.