...which I wrote.

I posted the thread in the Showcase forum, but since nobody really commented except for THRAWN thought I'd link it here as well. Thing is, I'll take the file off Google Docs by the week's end as I want to try to sell this after a few edits, so all comments about what works and what doesn't would be greatly appreciated.

http://forums.massassi.net/vb3/showthread.php?67140-So-I-wrote-a-HYPERTEXT-story-(9-endings)&p=1175759#post1175759

So yeah. Took me a bit to write, but comments were generally positive. Cmon, guys. Help me make a few $100 bills, they might come in handy.

PS. I estimate my chances of selling it (I plan to submit to Strange Horizons, but once they reject it I'll probably give up, heh) between 0 and 5%.

Truth to be told, man, as with Geb's forum games - a lot of text just makes my brain bleed. All I really need are horrible puns and videos of cats farting.

Maybe I'm just hoping to cause the same reaction with DXN's Mr. Exposition scenes. ... As in, brains bleeding. And cats farting.

At any rate, good luck!

Makes sense. But did you check it? I made sure not to put too much text per page until readers got invested. Anyway, thanks.