I wrote this a month ago in a half hour of spare time. It probably isnt very good but... oh well
Jace stepped onto the cold rock surface of Dantar IV with joy, the 40 year long severe electrical storm that had masked the ghost planet for centuries had finally lifted, to the suprise and excitement of the entire universe. Age old stories told by thieves and assassins throughout the galaxy told of a planet unlike any other, completely isolated from man, yet containing wealth below the surface capable of making the entire population of a medium sized planet instant and invulnarable warriors, with new metals never seen before, so light they floated without propellant and so powerful that they could overthrow the world. The planet had been used wisely for many hundreds of years before One man, by the name of Damion of the red order decided that he did not wan to share the unimaginable wealth of the planet with others, he could take it all for himself and quickly gain complete control of the galaxy. Others had had this idea before of course, but Damion had the added ability of being extremely talented in the force, both light and dark sides. He had found a way to use a third, previously unknown branch of the force on his own, and with the help of these new extremely unstable powers, he formed his own clan, and attempted to capture the planet, which was then considered neutral territory. The other clans in the galaxy, some out to save the universe for evil, some out to kill damion with a psychotic rage that blinded there sense, and some that knew Damion personally and knew what he was capable of, tryed to stop him at the planet. After suffering staggering losses, and almost being completely decimated by damions clan, the five rival clans finally, with the help of a mysterious man who gave them all information, developed a super weapon... A laser capable of trapping an area of space and time in a sort of limbo, that would never be broken unless the ones who made it fired the same laser form the same crystal at the area of limbo. This trapped not only Damion and his clan, but the five rival clans as well. but it was rumored that some had escaped... with knowledge of all that had happened there, but the rumors died out and time passed on diligently outside the giant blue storm that marked the area of that fateful battle. //////// 1. Jace caught his breath as he stepped silently onto the alien land, undisturbed for millinia upon millinea, he was the first person to actually touch the soil in the lifetimes of the oldest in the galaxy. How had he earned this privilage? He was captain of the space corvette Savanta, the flagship of the correllian fleet. After weeks of debate, the High council had decided to allow the correllians to have first rights to the planet, as the ship that discovered it was indeed correllian. Jace scanned the area with his macroscope, Some mountains to the west, possibly volcanic. A deep sea to the East, that extended past the horizen. A parching desert to the south, and to the north an icy plain. He felt a droplet of rain and looked up. He gasped as he saw in the sky above him not just a thundercloud, but a massive island suspended in the air, slightly above the clowd line... Jace swallowed and turned to his first mate, who was also looking up. "Luitenant Antilles, I would like to have the jedi sent to my quarters immediately, please make it so." "Yes sir," stammered the youth, "I'll do my best sir." "Good" Jace watched as the tall lad sauntered off to the jedi's quarters, not Wedge, he thought to himself, but a good lad nonetheless. The jedi he was not so sure about. Trained by Master Luke Skywalker himself, but they seemed awfully quiet to have done all of the things skywaler had said theyd done. There were three of them in all, and surprisingly enough, one was a woman. The woman was of medium height...with beautiful blonde hair that she always kept covered with the blue robe that identified her as masters apprentice. She was silent, having said two words the entire time she had been on board, and when she got on board in fact... "My room" Pretty though.. if not a little unnerving. The eldest, a Citanak( one of the recently discovered species of the core worlds) was a little more social, but the way he carried the two lightsabers at his belt guaranteed that he was of a very high jedi rank, this was varified by the black cloak that he wore, the same as master luke. The last one was the youngest... and acted that way. Even though he would talk alot to his companions, he seemed almost shy in front of any girl he saw elsewhere... shame too, he was a devilishly handsome lad, blue eyes, balck hair, and it seemed as though he was in training with the Archen whip... one of the newest weapons that skywalker had deemed suitable for the jedi to use in combat; the boy also had an oddly misshapen left hand that nobody had asked about for fear of what the jedi would do if insulted. It was somewhat gnarled midway down, as if some thing had bitten it and stopped growth. but he seemed quiet able despite his deformity. All three of them spent all of their time in their quarters training constantly with each other. Jace decided that he had best retire to his office, his duty on the surface for the time being complete.///////// Jace walked in to see the three jedi sitting in a row looking slightly exectantly at him. Jace cleared his throat and began, "I know all of you are here to be the expedition party to this unexplored planet, and I wish you good luck. I will be departing for orbit in approximetely 5 days. You are to contact me through the devices I will shortly give you, they will gaurantee safe transfers of information if you have any difficultys. they will be implanted into the inner ear of each of you. but I have a boon to ask. I wish for you to take one of my surface/capable ships, and my best pilot to transfer you around on the planets surface... my real motive is to leave the boy with you. not a jedi, but an extremely capable person trained by both Master luke and the head of the rangoon army. He is very capable in survival techniques and battle skills. He developed an original weapon for himself years ago, and has become quiet adept in the use of it. It is a divice grafted into his back, directly to his spinal cord, it enhances his abilitys when he tenses a certain series of muscles, and when he tenses other muscles, he does one of the following, his shoulders sprout curved scythes that he can control just as if they were arms, through his spinal impulses, he can sprout shiqure baldes form his knuckles, or he can cover himself completely with almost impenetrable calluses that can be called up, or let go just like tensing a muscle. However since it is tensing a musle, he can only do two of the things together at once. A very effective weapon that makes him almost inhuman on the battlefield. The pilot is my first mate, he is just a boy but he can fly a ship better than any other ive met. The bodyguard, if you will, is named Flaxen and the pilot is named Blake Antilles. this is your briefing, any questions? The jedi, who until now had been listening with passive interest, spoke up. the female said, " I am Comela, I am apprentice to Master skywalker. he sent me on this mission along with these others, whom i had not met until today, to scout the planet and destroy any threats there may be. He has enough confidence in me and apparently my "team", that he decided not to even go himself, we cant have our leader getting hurt on our watch. This Sitanak beside me is a veteran of the black wars and is almost on a level with skywalker himself. This other boy is simply that... a boy, I dont know why luke decided to let him tag along. We will take the ship, and the pilot, and if you think it is neccasary, the bodyguard too. but we can not guarantee that they will be returned alive.///////////The shuttle pulled out of the hanger with ease as the five started towrds the planets surface... they sped along the ground until nearly three miles from the ship, almost immediately after stopping midair, the Savanta took off, shaking the ground for miles around.
Thats as far as i got... anyone want to continue it... it could be good..
Jace stepped onto the cold rock surface of Dantar IV with joy, the 40 year long severe electrical storm that had masked the ghost planet for centuries had finally lifted, to the suprise and excitement of the entire universe. Age old stories told by thieves and assassins throughout the galaxy told of a planet unlike any other, completely isolated from man, yet containing wealth below the surface capable of making the entire population of a medium sized planet instant and invulnarable warriors, with new metals never seen before, so light they floated without propellant and so powerful that they could overthrow the world. The planet had been used wisely for many hundreds of years before One man, by the name of Damion of the red order decided that he did not wan to share the unimaginable wealth of the planet with others, he could take it all for himself and quickly gain complete control of the galaxy. Others had had this idea before of course, but Damion had the added ability of being extremely talented in the force, both light and dark sides. He had found a way to use a third, previously unknown branch of the force on his own, and with the help of these new extremely unstable powers, he formed his own clan, and attempted to capture the planet, which was then considered neutral territory. The other clans in the galaxy, some out to save the universe for evil, some out to kill damion with a psychotic rage that blinded there sense, and some that knew Damion personally and knew what he was capable of, tryed to stop him at the planet. After suffering staggering losses, and almost being completely decimated by damions clan, the five rival clans finally, with the help of a mysterious man who gave them all information, developed a super weapon... A laser capable of trapping an area of space and time in a sort of limbo, that would never be broken unless the ones who made it fired the same laser form the same crystal at the area of limbo. This trapped not only Damion and his clan, but the five rival clans as well. but it was rumored that some had escaped... with knowledge of all that had happened there, but the rumors died out and time passed on diligently outside the giant blue storm that marked the area of that fateful battle. //////// 1. Jace caught his breath as he stepped silently onto the alien land, undisturbed for millinia upon millinea, he was the first person to actually touch the soil in the lifetimes of the oldest in the galaxy. How had he earned this privilage? He was captain of the space corvette Savanta, the flagship of the correllian fleet. After weeks of debate, the High council had decided to allow the correllians to have first rights to the planet, as the ship that discovered it was indeed correllian. Jace scanned the area with his macroscope, Some mountains to the west, possibly volcanic. A deep sea to the East, that extended past the horizen. A parching desert to the south, and to the north an icy plain. He felt a droplet of rain and looked up. He gasped as he saw in the sky above him not just a thundercloud, but a massive island suspended in the air, slightly above the clowd line... Jace swallowed and turned to his first mate, who was also looking up. "Luitenant Antilles, I would like to have the jedi sent to my quarters immediately, please make it so." "Yes sir," stammered the youth, "I'll do my best sir." "Good" Jace watched as the tall lad sauntered off to the jedi's quarters, not Wedge, he thought to himself, but a good lad nonetheless. The jedi he was not so sure about. Trained by Master Luke Skywalker himself, but they seemed awfully quiet to have done all of the things skywaler had said theyd done. There were three of them in all, and surprisingly enough, one was a woman. The woman was of medium height...with beautiful blonde hair that she always kept covered with the blue robe that identified her as masters apprentice. She was silent, having said two words the entire time she had been on board, and when she got on board in fact... "My room" Pretty though.. if not a little unnerving. The eldest, a Citanak( one of the recently discovered species of the core worlds) was a little more social, but the way he carried the two lightsabers at his belt guaranteed that he was of a very high jedi rank, this was varified by the black cloak that he wore, the same as master luke. The last one was the youngest... and acted that way. Even though he would talk alot to his companions, he seemed almost shy in front of any girl he saw elsewhere... shame too, he was a devilishly handsome lad, blue eyes, balck hair, and it seemed as though he was in training with the Archen whip... one of the newest weapons that skywalker had deemed suitable for the jedi to use in combat; the boy also had an oddly misshapen left hand that nobody had asked about for fear of what the jedi would do if insulted. It was somewhat gnarled midway down, as if some thing had bitten it and stopped growth. but he seemed quiet able despite his deformity. All three of them spent all of their time in their quarters training constantly with each other. Jace decided that he had best retire to his office, his duty on the surface for the time being complete.///////// Jace walked in to see the three jedi sitting in a row looking slightly exectantly at him. Jace cleared his throat and began, "I know all of you are here to be the expedition party to this unexplored planet, and I wish you good luck. I will be departing for orbit in approximetely 5 days. You are to contact me through the devices I will shortly give you, they will gaurantee safe transfers of information if you have any difficultys. they will be implanted into the inner ear of each of you. but I have a boon to ask. I wish for you to take one of my surface/capable ships, and my best pilot to transfer you around on the planets surface... my real motive is to leave the boy with you. not a jedi, but an extremely capable person trained by both Master luke and the head of the rangoon army. He is very capable in survival techniques and battle skills. He developed an original weapon for himself years ago, and has become quiet adept in the use of it. It is a divice grafted into his back, directly to his spinal cord, it enhances his abilitys when he tenses a certain series of muscles, and when he tenses other muscles, he does one of the following, his shoulders sprout curved scythes that he can control just as if they were arms, through his spinal impulses, he can sprout shiqure baldes form his knuckles, or he can cover himself completely with almost impenetrable calluses that can be called up, or let go just like tensing a muscle. However since it is tensing a musle, he can only do two of the things together at once. A very effective weapon that makes him almost inhuman on the battlefield. The pilot is my first mate, he is just a boy but he can fly a ship better than any other ive met. The bodyguard, if you will, is named Flaxen and the pilot is named Blake Antilles. this is your briefing, any questions? The jedi, who until now had been listening with passive interest, spoke up. the female said, " I am Comela, I am apprentice to Master skywalker. he sent me on this mission along with these others, whom i had not met until today, to scout the planet and destroy any threats there may be. He has enough confidence in me and apparently my "team", that he decided not to even go himself, we cant have our leader getting hurt on our watch. This Sitanak beside me is a veteran of the black wars and is almost on a level with skywalker himself. This other boy is simply that... a boy, I dont know why luke decided to let him tag along. We will take the ship, and the pilot, and if you think it is neccasary, the bodyguard too. but we can not guarantee that they will be returned alive.///////////The shuttle pulled out of the hanger with ease as the five started towrds the planets surface... they sped along the ground until nearly three miles from the ship, almost immediately after stopping midair, the Savanta took off, shaking the ground for miles around.
Thats as far as i got... anyone want to continue it... it could be good..
Muffin Man my *** ....
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