This is just a follow on to the Serious story thread. Saberopus starts this thread.

what an honor.....give me thirty minutes, and i will post it.....


-opus

[how do i do italics, how do i do bolds]


[This message has been edited by saberopus (edited August 19, 2002).]

I think for Italics hello

for bold hello

check the edit to figure out.

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Nothing was out of ordinary this cold, bleak day on the surface of Kessel.

But then, few things that are routine on Kessel would be considered 'normal' bye outsiders.

“Normal. Such an indefinable term,” mused Kythaar Vos, sipping a Lomin Ale and setting his heavy booted feet onto the desk in front of him. The fact that the desk belonged to the superior officer to whom he was reporting to did little to concern him.

“In a way, there’s isn’t any way to quantify it. My expectations of what could happen, might not reflect yours in the least. For example, if I were to tell you that this morning I thought-“

“Stow it, Dorran. All I need is your shift report. Was everything normal? And get your feet of my desk, you will not forget who is in charge here.”

“My name is not DORRAN! I will not put up with this shameless insulting.” And yes, he thought, yes I do know who is in charge, and when he reveals himself, won’t you just be the manifestation of shock when you realize you’ve never been in control of your future. Of all of our futures.

He allowed himself a small smile, calming drastically with the thought of the impending management change. “But yes, sir. All is normal in the mines. Guards maintaining control, prisoners at the ready.”

General Maradir shifted in his chair. “Well. I suppose you can go now, but make sure Maldet gets to his shift on time.” His attention span exhausted, he returned to his datapad, playing games or checking files, Vos didn’t know. But in reality, he couldn’t care less.

He slipped out of the office. His slight smile turning into a grin, he remembered his meeting three weeks prior…


-opus


[This message has been edited by saberopus (edited August 19, 2002).]

ooookay.....

i thought i was just a start. Where are the additions?

-opus

Thinking, kinda rough start tho. What meeting and with who? We need to know a lot of what's happening.

[This message has been edited by Shadow89 (edited August 20, 2002).]

no u don't need to know whats happening, you need to make up whats happening!

i said i'd start, and wherever i left a gap someone was supposed to fill in


i alluded to a meeting in which Vos learned someone else would take over the mining facilities on kessel

add

now

please.......!


-opus

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Vos had just finished his shift and was reporting to his sleeping quarters when he passed his superior officers office. He heard two voices, none that sounded familiar.

"Wait a minute" Vos thought, "where the hell is Maradir?"

Curious, Vos stepped closer to the door so he could hear the voices.

"......and then boss said that we would be taking control of the mining facility." said the first mysterious voice. "He has planned everything from the start. In a matter of time, he will kill all the officers and replace them with his insiders. They will then destroy the mining corp. from the inside."

"what will we do with the miners?" The second voice said.

"Boss said that they will come to our cause. Weather they like it or not..."

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Hows that?

[This message has been edited by Shadow89 (edited August 22, 2002).]

well, you said mine was rough, yours needs serious help

no doubt its better than most on this site

but-

its lacks varance in sentence structure.
You never alluded to anything, just set it down flat...

just...'there it is'

dunno

i'll add on in twenty minutes

thanks!

btw, i guess its just you and me shadow!

oh well

-opus

Yeah, I guess it's just us. (Looks despiratly at High Emperor and Tracer) Damn.


20 minutes aye?

nay......i won't post again until tom....sorry

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- opus -

i declare this thread dead...just me and shadow cant do this, its not interactive then

i will merely resume my role of adding a tiny sparkle of joy to other stories with my posts....lol


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- opus -