umm...ya I will show them, but remember that not only are they half-finished, i am new to this, seeing as they are only my second and third real songs that i made. Also i havent started making my own loops yet.....and yes i know it pales in comparison to anything most people make, but im just learning. Here they are;

http://home.comcast.net/~aikanaro/Maelstrom.mp3
http://home.comcast.net/~aikanaro/Triumph.mp3

Go easy on me, please dont be very critical ;/

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anyone want to comment at all.....?

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Life is too important to take seriously
-Oscar Wilde

That's pretty good. But unless you're just going for some background music intended to be played at a low volume, I do have a suggestion; Use alot less variation. The melody changes so much you can't make out any set patterns. For example, in triumph, at 0:16, there's this great guitar riff that comes in, but stops after a few seconds and never comes back. I wanted to hear more of that riff. If it helps, you could compose like I do; instead of writing from start to finish, start by writing a chorus, then expand the rest of the song from there.

Other than that, keep up the good work!

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thanks, and about it being background, thats what im working on for Grismath. He wants me to create some background music for him, so if he doesnt mind, when i finish that ill post it.

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Life is too important to take seriously
-Oscar Wilde

Sounds good! I personally like the changing melody. It flowed pretty smoothly, given what I've heard out there with changing melodies against a new chord progression.

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