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poll the audience, please
2004-03-27, 2:06 PM #1
i just made this little sad piece, and i was wondering is there any point in continuing, and if so, what way should i take it?

http://home.comcast.net/~aikanaro/Rising_sun.mp3

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2004-03-27, 2:37 PM #2
Um...

YES.

Sounds like it could be one of those songs you mellow out with.

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[This message has been edited by DogSRoOL (edited March 27, 2004).]
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2004-03-28, 10:58 AM #3
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YES.
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Sounds great so far...please continue


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Tell me not in mournful numbers, Life is but an empty dream, For the soul is dead that slumbers, and things are not as they seem. Life is real, Life is ernest, the grave is not it's goal; Dust thou art, Dust thou returnest, Was not spoken of the soul.
~William Shakespeare
People are like stained-glass windows.
They sparkle and shine when the sun is out, but when the darkness sets in,
their true beauty is revealed only
if there is a light from within.
-Elizabeth Kübler-Ross
2004-03-28, 11:18 AM #4
That was beautiful. Definitely continue.
I'm not sure about where to take it, sorry. I think you'd do a better job of figuring that out than I would.

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2004-03-28, 12:58 PM #5
It's a very good start. I do have a few suggestions;

Firstly, your strings at the begining come in a bit strong. Try tweaking the att and get the notes to come in smoothly.. it makes it sound more realistic, but also more relaxed and fitting for the atmosphere you're trying to achieve.

Also, once the piano sets in, the song feels a bit empty. The piano melody is great.. but it feels like something's missing. Perhaps some lighter, pitchier strings could make an appearance in the background, or perhaps somesort of synthetiser playing long extended notes.

Other than that it sounds great. Definately keep working on it.

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2004-03-28, 2:02 PM #6
is this what you mean Flexor? i also added a few seconds at the end:
http://home.comcast.net/~aikanaro/Rising_sun.mp3
Note- replaces the first link

edit- i think i am going to delete the string loops after the piano, so disregard them unless you like them
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Life is too important to take seriously.
~Oscar Wilde

[This message has been edited by Aikanaro (edited March 28, 2004).]
There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line.
~ Oscar Levant
2004-03-29, 3:10 AM #7
kinda. it's better now [http://forums.massassi.net/html/smile.gif]

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