Could anyone tell me if the following melody is used in another song? If not, I'm going to use it to write a song for a lady friend.

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[edit: Also, I gots bad grammar.]

...Seriously if you have to ask, then that should be enough right there...

Here's a few songs it reminded me of:

David Bowie - Space Oddity
Coldplay - We Never Change (actually, if you just played chords it would almost be the exact same thing)
Jump - Midnight (reminds me of it)
Muse - Sing for Absolution
Starsailor - Way to Fall
The Films - Reason

point is, your chords sound like those songs, and those are some just off the top of my head. but that's not a melody, or at least i hope it's not. that's a chord progression which a lot of artists use because it sounds cool. you can take G C D and make a good song with those chords without sounding totally cliche, Damien Rice does it all the time.

I don't listen to a lot of music, and I often hear something, forget what song it is, then it pops up in my head later on when I'm trying to write something. Not really a good thing. But I'll check out some of those songs and see if they sound too similar to what I have in mind. I may end up doing it on piano instead of guitar, anyway.

[edit: actually, it not that I don't listen to a lot, but I don't actively listen to a lot.]

It sounds a bit like the song I'm listening to right now, You and Your Sister by Chris Bell.

But it doesn't really matter, because I don't think it's a copy of any songs. Write it for her, I think she'll like it.

I've written...
[insert drumroll]

...one line.

I suck at this.

Or I'm being way to picky with my lyrics. But I hate cheesy sounding lyrics.

If you're writing it for a girl, there's going to be cheesy lyrics.

Girls do tend to have a much higher tolerance for cheesiness than guys do.

I recommend making it simple and sweet if you don't want cheesy. The song I mentioned earlier is a great example of this: the chorus goes
"All I want to do
Is to spend some time with you
So I can hold you"

It's very simple but effective. Another example, this time from a Big Star song called Thirteen (written from a 13 year old's perspective) :

"Won't you let me walk you home from school
Won't you let me meet you at the pool
Maybe friday I can get tickets for the dance
And I'll take you"

I hope my point is coming through okay. I think it would be effective to focus on wanting to spend time with her, and not on your undying love or something.

Or you could just play her U2's 'All I Want is You'

True. But I like to be vivid with lyrics, and certain words just don't fly well with me. And I'm not used to writing a song for someone. But I have three lines now. I'll try to simplify as much as I can without sacrificing meaning.