I had a dream about a man
He wore a robe, he took my hand
He wandered off into the sand
And that’s where, I saw the land…

The Land of lights, The Land of hope
The land where no one needs to mope

This land I saw, This land I walked
This land where no one needs to talk

I turned to him, He turned to me
We turned onto our long journey

We walked for miles, We walked for days
We kept on walking through the haze

The sky got dark, The sky got pale
The skies tendencies began to flail

The land we love, The land we trust
The land was turning into dust

The air was thick, the ground was cracked
We had no hope of turning back

We had to stop, we had to fall
We had no chance to live at all

The man cried, And I cried too
The lands last chance was through

The Land of lights, The Land of hope
The land where no one had to mope

The land I saw, The land I walked
The land where no one had to talk

My land of dreams, My dream of lands
My dream of holy open sands

This is the end, But don’t you frown
I think I’ll soon be back around

Back In The Land...

The Land of lights, The Land of hope
The land where no one needs to mope

The land you see, The land you walk
The land where no one needs to talk

Le Bump. *bop*

Is this about Jesus?

I don't agree with your poetic conventions, but I respect that you created this. Although it does not appeal to me personally, I like it. Nice work.

Heh, one of the reasons I wrote the song the way I did was to make people guess. I actually didn't write this about Jesus. It's meant to be whoever you want it to be. Whoever you'd see in the perfect place.

It's about me having a dream and in that dream I go to the perfect place where everyone was at peace, but something happens and we need to leave, so we go on this journey, but as we venture out we realize the rest of this world isn't as perfect as we once thought. It all falls apart and I basically 'die' or 'wake up'. But whenever I want I can just fall back asleep and dream of this perfect land again.

As I was reading it, I felt like it was taking about the destruction of the earth, and where we will be afterwards. I didn't think of the man as Jesus, but more as a symbol for all man... but then again I'm crazy.

Anyway, I really hate some of the rhymes in this song. It feels like you are sacrificing some things just to make the words match the rhyme scheme.

Heh, that's the EXACT idea I was going for while writing this, but as I kept reading it over I thought of different ways to interpret the song, which is one of the reasons I like this one. I posted earlier in response to Master Tonberry the actual translation of the song, and you just posted my basic translation of the metaphors of the song. So far each of my friends have thought this song meant something different. So, no you aren't crazy, you hit the nail on the head.



I see what you mean, I sung the song in my head to the 'mental tune' I made for it, and these two sets of lines don't really fit, I think I should re-do them or something :/

The sky got dark, The sky got pale
The skies tendencies began to flail

The man cried, And I cried too
The lands last chance was through

Hah, those were two of the pairs I didn't like! These lines in the chorus I also don't like:

The Land of lights, The Land of hope
The land where no one needs to mope

The second line mostly... it just seems like you were struggling to find something to rhyme with hope.

Also, it seems like through out the whole thing you have an iambic pattern (unaccented - accented), for instance:

I had a dream about a man
He wore a robe, he took my hand

You break this a couple times though:

And that’s where, I saw the land…

The skies tendencies began to flail

The man cried, And I cried too

Except for those three lines, the whole thing is uh, iambic quadrameter (4 iambs per line). Of course, since this is a song, you could just fix that with the way you sing it, but I just wanted to point them out.

And the reason I'm beating this horse is because I'm bored and drank too much caffeine tonight.