It's unfinished but I'm looking for opinions on if its good to continue it or move on. Note, the flow may change (its rapped btw ).

{Verse 1}

Now before you judge the title of this song;
Listen to it before you label it wrong;
I ain't gonna be talking about killing or raping;
Steer clear of those stereotypes and see what I'm saying;
I believe that when we die we dead, nothing more or less;
No special heaven or hell, no where to go just 6 feet, unless;
You believe in that religion ****;
I don't, so I don't have to worry how I'm burried or blessed;
As long as I'm in one peice, old, I'll confess to earths process;
But it don't matter cause I'll be dead and confined;
Put to rest in a coffin of mine;
When I'm dead I only hope that my seed will be happy;
Perhaps even live till the end of time;
That ain't gonna happen as death waits at the bend;
The long tunnel will eventually comes to a end;
No matter what you do you can't escape it friend;
Just accept it, be happy but don't blend;
Try to be different and atend your own thing;
Copying someone else is nothing but confusing;
Might as well kill yourself now and stop that struggle;
Living for everyone but yourself, you'll be nothing special;
So try and enjoy life while you can;
Because Before you know it, you'll be a deadman;

Now I have 2 choruses(sp?), to choose from but I'm not sure which one to keep, or have both?

First:
Nobody wants to embrace death but life instead;
It gives us our breath to misplace and spread;
A humans nature to conquer and see whats ahead;
it doesn't matter what we accomplish we're dead;

Second:
Death isn't something to love or hate;
Its here deal with it but don't create it;
Killing has no purpose so don't instigate it;
Living to the fullest is the best, you'll make it;



[This message has been edited by Sol (edited February 03, 2004).]

It's decent for a rap song. The problem with rap is that 99.9% of rappers aren't capable of keeping their songs consistant. They're constantly changing subjects and the songs only make sense if you take a line or two out of context. They rarely make sense as a whole. Your lyrics are more consistant than most rap songs that I've heard, but although you may not speak of killing or rape, it still has a depressing tone, and I can't much get into that. I'm probably not the person to critique such music, I can in no way relate to rap at all...

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Thanks for the comment! *bump*

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Massassian since: March 12, 2001

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Even if you murdered or robbed, years wrong, but God loves;
Take one step toward him, he takes two toward you;
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