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Another poem
2004-02-25, 4:15 PM #1
Hands down before we start the race.
Moments from now I pick up the pace.

Until then I wait in antici........
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SURPRISE!

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Baby Mama's Drama
TAKES HINTS JUST FINE, STILL DOESN'T CARE
2004-02-25, 4:16 PM #2
Rocky Horror Picture Show > Zul.....
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jin

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2004-02-25, 4:17 PM #3
I liked the climax of it. Two thumbs up.

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Corrupting the kiddies since '97
2004-02-25, 5:57 PM #4
Someone hand the man a towel.

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2004-02-26, 7:34 AM #5
Your perfect use of structure is only matched by the sophisticated vocabulary. Clever usage of rhyme as well... "race"... "pace". Who would have thought of that, eh?

A masterpiece. I especially enjoyed the bits with the dots.

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[This message has been edited by GhostOfYoda (edited February 26, 2004).]
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2004-02-26, 12:15 PM #6
I like the use of allusion.
A desperate disease requires a dangerous remedy.

A major source of objection to a free economy is precisely that it gives people what they want instead of what a particular group thinks they ought to want. Underlying most arguments against the free market is a lack of belief in freedom itself.

art
2004-02-26, 12:45 PM #7
You guys make fun, but you'd be surprised by the cra- err... poetry I've read for school published in books.

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If you choose not to decide, you still have made a choice.

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2004-02-26, 2:16 PM #8
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<font face="Verdana, Arial" size="2">You guys make fun, but you'd be surprised by the cra- err... poetry I've read for school published in books.</font>


....you don't have to look that far to see crap poetry.

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I live in the weak, and the wounded.
2004-02-26, 4:06 PM #9
Why can't you take me seriously as an artist?!

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Baby Mama's Drama
TAKES HINTS JUST FINE, STILL DOESN'T CARE
2004-02-26, 5:27 PM #10
Because you suck?
2004-02-26, 6:37 PM #11
This is much better improved than the other one. [http://forums.massassi.net/html/biggrin.gif]
Hokey religions and ancient weapons are no match for a good blaster at your side
2004-02-27, 5:01 AM #12
Wow, the twist at the end made it all worth it.
2004-02-27, 7:51 AM #13
I came.
2004-02-27, 1:37 PM #14
I Saw.

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2004-02-27, 4:16 PM #15
I'm Rick James, BIATCH.

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In Tribute to Adam Sliger. Rest in Peace

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2004-02-27, 4:17 PM #16
I broke the chain post.
Hokey religions and ancient weapons are no match for a good blaster at your side
2004-02-27, 4:40 PM #17
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<font face="Verdana, Arial" size="2">Originally posted by Ubuu:
I'm Rick James, BIATCH.</font>

What did the five fingers, say to the face? SLAP!
2004-02-27, 4:49 PM #18
Cocaine's a hell of a drug...

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