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Poem about a battle in WWI
2004-04-15, 4:57 PM #1
The battle of Jutland, more specifically. I just love this battle. We were studying it recently in my history class, and it's just awesome. I decided to try an ABAB rhyming scheme. (Note- Some of the rhymes need to be stretched a bit, or said in a different way than normal to work.. but I wanted it that way. Things like that piss my english teacher off so much, and I really can't stand her, so I get on her nerves like that.)

The Battle of Jutland

The Battle of Jutland
Taught those damn Germans a lesson.
British knocked them on their butts an'
Caused the admiral to start sweatin'.

Sink, sank, sunk
British and German both.
Their ships turned into junk
And away the sailors rowth.

England lost fourteen and Germany eleven
When the dreadnoughts and cruisers clashed.
The bread of the Germans was not yet levened
When their only naval fleet was mashed.

The end of the War at Sea this was
British supremecy proven once more.
No one picked up on the buzz
And thus few were left to clean up the gore.

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2004-04-15, 4:59 PM #2
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<font face="Verdana, Arial" size="2">They lost their funk</font>


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2004-04-15, 5:00 PM #3
Better? [http://forums.massassi.net/html/tongue.gif]

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2004-04-15, 5:40 PM #4
Here's an appropriate analogy that I shall use to illustrate my opinion.

You are to poetry as Hitler was to minorities.

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2004-04-15, 6:06 PM #5
Hmmm, sounds alright. I'm also studying some WWI in a book since I don't know much about the war.
2004-04-15, 6:16 PM #6
sounds more like a rap song... about ww1 O_o

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2004-04-15, 6:22 PM #7
Go Britian....it's your birthday, we gonna party like it's your birthday......



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2004-04-15, 10:02 PM #8
Egh...

I don't know why you're going on praising it as a victory for the British.

Quote:
<font face="Verdana, Arial" size="2"> During the battle the actual force under Jellicoe was twenty-eight dreadnoughts and nine battlecruisers, while Scheer had sixteen dreadnoughts, five battlecruisers and six obsolete pre-dreadnoughts. The British were superior in lighter vessels as well. In terms of weight of broadside the British had an advantage of 332,360 lb (151 t) against 134,216 lb (61 t).

This British superiority was countered by certain technical factors: German gunnery was more accurate, in part because the British had adopted an inferior firing control design; German ships had thicker armour against torpedo attack and more water-tight doors; German armour-piercing shells were more effective than the British shells; and, vitally important, the British used an oversensitive propellant, and their magazines were not well protected. Another serious blow to the British was the exceptionally poor communications between their ships.

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The British lost fourteen ships of 111,000 tons total and 6,784 men . The Germans lost eleven ships of 62,000 tons total and 3,058 men. Several other ships were badly damaged, such as HMS Lion and SMS Seydlitz. Regarding ships that could fight again at the end of that day, the British had twenty-four dreadnoughts and battlecruisers ready to fight while the Germans had only ten, so the British still had command of the sea. For the British, the outcome could be seen as giving a tactical loss but a strategic gain. The Germans left the field, while the British remained and were ready to continue the next day. On the other hand, the threat from the German navy did not disappear; contrary to some opinions, it remained still active, though the two battle fleets never met again.

The weak design and faulty use of the battlecruisers were important in the serious losses of the British. The battle is often regarded as demonstrating that the Royal Navy was technologically inferior to the German Navy. At the time the caution of Jellicoe was also attacked; but it should be noted that Scheer was not seeking a fight, and with two fleets of roughly equal speeds it is difficult to decisively fight an enemy determined not to be engaged. On the other hand, Scheer was perhaps lucky in the chances of events and Jellicoe was unlucky, and the battle began late in the day.

- http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Battle_of_Jutland </font>


So I'd say that your
"Taught those damn Germans a lesson.
British knocked them on their butts an'
Caused the admiral to start sweatin'." isn't so accurate at all...

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2004-04-16, 1:39 PM #9
Well, when I say the british won the battle, true they lost more ships, but that battle convinced the Germans not to mess with the British navy agian.

Thus winning.

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2004-04-16, 8:14 PM #10
Sort of reminds me of a song we listened to in world history by some irish guy about the australian troops' beach landing attempt in turkey (i think) which failed horribly. It was kind of blunt, but really good. Unfortunately some of the girls in the class couldn't get past how strangely worded it was, and kept GIGGLING. What the hell? "I looked down at where my legs used to be and i wondered what we were fighting for" is not a funny lyric.

Anyway, damn right, those brits sure showed them germans! [http://forums.massassi.net/html/biggrin.gif]

WWI was really just a WWII pre-test, am I right?

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