Alright, I need help with my Char bio for Vampire: Dark Ages. I think the one I've got now is fairly good as far as a generic char bio, but I need to know how I can improve it, (as in what to emphasize, what other kind of events to add in) what kind of things I should maybe take out, and if I should change anything.

Attaching it would help, probably

Yes, his name is Ludmilla. Ludmilla Zog.

... a Tremere whore who randomly embraces people after violently killing someone else? A Tremere who leaves a childe? A drunk who recognizes vampires? Putting one's sire into their "ranks?" A Tremere who starts an Elysium?

I didnt think tremere were the type to masquerade as hookers.

Yoshi i think you should mention the salubri and tzimisce.
The salubri you need help in bringing down, and the tzimisce are your enemy.

mention your tremere powers some more.

Add a flaw here or there

if(getThingFlags(source) & 0x8){
  do her}
elseif(getThingFlags(source) & 0x4){
  do other babe}
else{
  do a dude}

Keep in mind that the Tremere were born of a very hiearchal order of Mages (the Hermetic Order, to be exact). They are very dedicated to the bureaucratic system set up within the Tremere clan -- each Tremere is blood-bound to their sire to strengthen and reinforce this dedication and also bound to the original seven that founded the clan under Tremere himself.

In addition, Tremere are not whores. They are occulstists, scholars, and researchers, always seeking supreme knowledge and power (both within the clan and for the clan as a whole). A whore would be too busy whoring to be able to accomplish any real Thaumaturgical research.

As was said above, a Tremere would not simply Embrace and leave. To give out the secret of Thaumaturgy (a thing that they guard jealously, and still depise Goratrix for giving to the Sabbat -- though this is centuries after the DA setting) to someone and effectively render them a Caitiff would result in (if they actually bothered with going through the pipelines) a request to the prince for the right to destroy both you and your sire.

A Tremere being allowed an Elysium is not going to happen in Dark Ages. At all. Most vampires despise, look down upon, and spit on the Tremere. The few that do associate with them do so in secret -- being associated with the Tremere is tantamount to political suicide, and you're lucky if you don't end up kidnapped and staked outside for the sun to take you.

In addition, a Tremere's sire would never accept being placed within servitude below his/her childe, unless he/she was ordered or demoted by his/her superiors.

You need to realize that, in the eyes of most Cainites, you are the scum of the earth, just above the Baali, and a few steps beneath the Caitiff. The Tremere clan was not founded by another vampire. It was founded by mortal men who kidnapped vampires, drained them of their vitae, and mixed a concoction that gave them the vampiric life. The Tzimisce hate you because Tremere and his seven lieutenants kidnapped some Tzimisce for their concoction. The Gangrel hate you because the Tremere have kidnapped Gangrel for their experiments to create the gargoyles. The Salubri fear and hate you because Tremere killed their sire, and your entire clan is out to wipe them all out. Friends of the Salubri despise you because you're wiping out the Salubri.

*cough* thread revival... been 3 weeks, and I think Yoshi is still banned so he can't reply anyway :p

why is he banned?

Because Brian is an evil nazi who enjoys burning small children in pyres of super-hot flames.

By emphasize, you mean elaborate.[/CoW]