The last leaf has fallen
Casting aside the beauty of it all
Sheltered in the naked limbs of heart aches lonely call
Facing the new day as the sun begins to rise
Autumn's deep serenity rests in it's demise

Beautiful as always... I wrote a sonnet about winter once that was quite similar to that.... remind me to show you sometime.

<3

yeah, i will.

While very old-school, it's quite well done. I'm impressed.

(A little secret: When I post on a poetry thread, that means I actually took the poem seriously. all the other poetry threads... I'm avoiding posting in because I've got to many complaints on the poem.)

I just wish you could write it a bit longer, and with it, hold some more of a message that goes a bit deeper. As is, it's sort of stationary and unmoving. It's going no where, only making an observation.

JediKirby

well i posted a small sample of my poetry because i wanted to see if anyone is interested in my poetry. Thank you for the compliment though and i like your name. Its so awesome. Kirby with the power of the force.

And a capitol punishment to go along with it all.

(Post more)

Oh? I'm not afraid of your criticism, fire away on my thread. But don't use "too many complaints" as an excuse if you don't want to.

But back to the thread:

Is the "it's" on the last line intentional or supposed to be "its". :p I like it and echo the call for more.