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Demonheart (flash fiction)
2005-10-16, 7:34 PM #1
Demonheart
by Max Salnikov, 2005.

If we were to look down from the cold abyss of cosmos and zoom-in on a forgotten, lifeless corner of the Earth, a place where no living creature ventures anymore, we would see that there are foot trails across the desert dunes, leading nowhere in particular. Foot trails left by a machine of absolute love and absolute destruction.

Heat.

Sand grains between her gears, the paint on her metal plates burnt away, some of her wires torn, hanging out, the only thing pushing her forward was her desire to live. All her artificial life she’s been taught to survive. And so she did. She’s been also taught to understand her creators. She was programmed to think like a woman. A woman made out of plastic and carbon steel. And so she did.

Her name is Alice.

She has a demonheart.

Dried blood on her fingertips. She loved her creators, with all her synthetic heart, loved the sound of their voices, loved the pulsating heat of their hands. But she was built to think like one of them. And when the missiles hit, and when every single person who made her feel like she was truly alive had been slain, when oceans boiled and cities became but rubble, and she was the only sentient being left on the face of the planet, she went across the deserts to find the only other sentient being left on the face of the planet, to find it, and to kill it.

Because she was programmed to think like one of them.

And now, if we were zoom-out, to return to the cold emptiness of space, and search across many stars for a million years, and find a civilization of peace and prosperity, even then, we would never forget the fiery heart beating inside Alice’s chest of carbon steel.
幻術
2005-10-16, 8:54 PM #2
Fire for Effect!

I like it.
2005-10-18, 1:47 AM #3
Thanks. I appreciate the comment. To be frank, I'm not very fond of this piece of mine, but I had to write SOMETHING, didn't write in a month or two. So, thanks again.
幻術
2005-10-18, 5:39 AM #4
You should start to write every day. I like your style of writing very much (don't know if this is a compliment, though, as I'm no native English speaker) and would definately buy your first book, if the setting was something I like.
"Häb Pfrässe, süsch chlepfts!" - The coolest language in the world (besides Cherokee)
2005-10-18, 7:08 AM #5
I really like how you managed to get so much story and meaning into so few words. It's almost like a poem.
Sorry for the lousy German
2005-10-20, 2:32 PM #6
Awesomeness. Thanks for reading, gentlemen.
幻術

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