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This is my JKHub contest entry.... posted here because I can't seem to get enough critiques at the Hub.

I know I shouldn't be doing this at all, since I'm envolved in so many more important projects... but I'm taking this on to try and get myself back on track in editing. It seems I need a great deal of practice on my time management skills. I've let a lot of my good friends down (I'm sorry, Kirby) because I just can't seem to squeeze in enough time for them, and that's just not right.

Well here it is.... so much more to do, so little time. What do you think so far?

I doubt that you will get any more critiques (at least not negative ones) here. This is ****ing sweet.

Holy wow!

Since you already know that I think it's the best thing since sliced bread, I will try and offer a few stray pieces of criticism, Hal!

First off, are those blue orbs in the alcoves on your central tower meant to be evenly spaced from each other? Because they don't seem to be, and that really bothers my sense of symmetry. I dunno, maybe I just can't see the whole thing, but all in all, this is fairly minor and you probably know what you're doing. Still, I'd like to know why that is and whether or not it should be.

Well, uhm, more crititques? Well blow me down, it's like trying to find a needle in one metric ton of bantha fodder! :p You've outdone yourself, really. Mind telling us anything about this level's story? I love it when editors take the time to give their level's cool names and (hence) hopefully a good story or background.

The pillars on the bottom in the second screenshot on the Hub seem a bit bland.

I hate you for making this. It makes all my stuff look like infantile rubbish.

It all looks nice, but something realy makes the overall thing feel, as Grismath said, bland. Sexy textures really spice up what WOULD be probably basic archi. Any archi that IS nice is lost to inconsistant lighting. Try not using the lighter, and work a bit more with contrast-lighting. It's a REALLY difficult way of lighting, but I think it'll help you out worlds. Even if you do some .5 surface lighting adjustments to some of the really detailed lighting's lip-surfaces, it'll give a lot more definition to the archi.

For those of you who are about to hit the quote button on what I just said: Halucid is capable of perfect. I am capable of telling him how to be perfect. If you don't like my criticism: Ignore it. If it helps you feel more at peace with yourself, add 'For you halucid' to each critical sentance. Furthermore, the criticism isn't for YOU, it's for him.

JediKirby

As long as you're not being defensive, Kirby.

Great work Halucid. That's the kind of stuff that makes the showcase forum fun to visit!

[edit] you can go easy on the watermarking though...

I feel the same

Anyhow, superb work.

Daft - I'm glad you asked! Well to start, I'd like to mention that this is a recreation of a map I was working on in early 2001, before Neurotic. The idea was a small construct with a portal in the center that linked 2 points in time. I grew to hate the map, and I beleted it outta disgust. I sucked back then. If I find the screens I took of it, I'll show you. This version's concept has changed just slightly.... instead of bending time, I now intend to bend space.... I'd explain, but I don't wanna ruin the surprise.

"Mobius" is from the astronomer and mathematician August Ferdinand Möbius, and his Mobius Strip concept that inspired this map (for reasons that will become clear when you play it). The word Mobius has grown synnonymous to infinity.

"Grith" is an old english word for sanctuary or protection, from the norse "gridh", meaning asylum.

....and yes, those circles are lined up. It's a perspective thing.

Kirby - Funny thing is, the first time I ever spoke to you was when I expressed my digust for your critiques of my work. Now, to be honest, your opinions are amoung most important to me. I know what you mean about the lighting. Actually, I haven't really done the lighting yet (I just threw some dynamic lights in and switched on the goggles for the sreenshots). First I need to decide what I'm gunna do for the light's sources. I actually all ready have surface lighting in there. If I fail at lighting properly, it'll be a shame. All the detail that I made will just go unnoticed. I do realize it's importance.

Fardreamer - Heh, sorry about the obnoxious watermarks. These screens actually double for me as personal wallpapers... so they're there for my own enjoyment. In hindsight, I shudda posted the original version before I made these.... but I didn't. So tough nuggets.

Fantastic work as always, halucid.

It sucks. Everything about it is wrong, etc.