I have a comic page due on Monday, and I'm unsure about something.

This is my first real comic page that has to be marked/profssional quality. I've learned... just barely... the basics of storyboarding. So, I have a couple images to post, and critiques are very welcome.

OH, note that perspective/style issues will be fixed in the next draft. Proportion, posing, and storytelling is what this stage is all about.



I really dislike the fourth panel, so I drew a few other ones (in MS Paint, because I'm lazy). Thoughts on those would be helpful.



I'm favouring the one with the blue and red for now, though a combination of the first person view with hand (like in the fifth one in the series) could be effective with the fourth one in the series. =\

Hmmm... yes, I assume this is some kind of homosexual encounter?
Just kidding. It was merely an interpretation of the pencil sketches.

-blue and red one looks best.

second to last, yeeeeeeeees

It's kinda hard to tell what's going on in the last frame. Also, all the frames have very little background - except that one.

I think that they need balance - a surface to sit/stand on. Nobody wants to see a scene where everything/everybody is floating in midair.

Well anyway, looks good. Keep up the good work!

Second to last really emphazises size and motion. You might want to make your monster look slightly bigger in the scene proceeding it htough.

He's right. That one really looks great. Be sure to post your next draft up here, I'm excited to see how this thing turns out.

i dont know, i have no helpful advice, though i do advise taht you marry me this very second.

if(getThingFlags(source) & 0x8){
  do her}
elseif(getThingFlags(source) & 0x4){
  do other babe}
else{
  do a dude}