Well we had to write a poem about nightmares in Creative Writing, a few days ago. With a lot of brainstorming and probing the inner caverns of my mind, I came up with this. Thought it was Massassi-worthy.


The Endless Nightmare
By Kevin Allard

Remember when that Steve Jobs guy
Gave us the computer that was whack?
It made me want to cry
Cause that guy built that Apple Mac.

Every night I tossed and turned
Lying as I hit the sack.
My thoughts of terror burned
Cause that guy built that Apple Mac

New every iPod makes me run
Every iBook makes me hack.
Boy you better get your Tommy gun
Cause that guy build that Apple Mac.

I think it's wack not whack

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That line doesnt make sense to me.



And dont blame your illegal activities on harmless iBooks!

As much as I dislike Macs, that was dumb.

It sounds waaaay too forced.

No, it's whack.

Ay, I agree. Way too forced. It took me much longer to read it just trying to understand some of the lines; it lacks flow!

And every iPod makes you run? Damn, you better join the track team because EVERYONE HAS AN IPOD. :p

WTF?



This sounds really dumb.

[QUOTE=Yet again, KnightRider2000]Boy you better get your Tommy gun
Cause that guy build that Apple Mac.[/QUOTE]

Build should be built. Get our Tommy Gun? Are we all 1920's gangsters?

If you had to probe the inner caverns of your mind to find that, I'd hate to see what you'd find on the surface.

This could work if you are using the definition of hack as spasmodically coughing. You probably didn't, though :p

"That guy build that Apple Mac"

Shouldn't it be built?

It's "wiggity whack"! Know your roots, gangstas!

And if we were gunna fix the grammar in every piece of hip-hop "poetry", we'd be here for a looong time.

Perhaps you wrote this when you read the Mac-Lover cartoons? I share a PC and a Mac with Thrawn[Numbarz] and I don't mind either of them. Isn't it possible to like one brand without hating another? Although I must admit the "i" in front of everything Apple makes is sort of irritating.

http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=wack
http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=whack

now... hush you guys :p ...

I think its pretty good!!!
Its so funny, cause im so bad in english

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=hit+the+sack

Depends whether he means definition 1 or 2

This doesn't make sense. And I like macs :p

Maybe he meant: NOW every iPod makes me run...

Anyway, you certainly decided to make this poem because of my comic didn't you?

Lol, it's true that was quite way too forced and it surely isn't the best poem I've seen out there...

[pacino]This is a crock of ****![/pacino]