I've never fancied myself a poet, but last night in the shower I came up with this. Enjoy.

Some say that WinXP's bloated
Knowing them they are probably right
But I wouldn't know about that
'Cause my newest game's Jedi Knight

It's funny, but very arythmic. You have to somehow lengthen the third line. Maybe "Though in fact I wouldn't know about that". Or without the "Though". Also, I'd shorten the second line to "Knowing them they're probably right".

I would add probably before wouldn't in the third line to lengthen it.

I don't know anything about poetry unless I'm analysing techniques.

Boco's addition sucks. >.>

I like it just the way it is.

Needs imagery. I was bored and came up with this in ten minutes.


Some say that if WinXP travelled the sea,
It could hardly reach distant cyber lands,
Sinking under the weight of its bulky body,
But I never hear the creaking of its deck,
Playing Jedi Knight in another galaxy.