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The Cheetah
2007-01-28, 8:18 AM #1
The Cheetah

Silence takes the room by chance
As the cheetah marks it's prey
An opportune time to advance
Leaves the cheetah in dismay

The prey stops in a mid walk
It's eyes are calm and steady
Yet it still stares as if to mock
As if it knows it is not ready

Almost as if there was a life
That shared between the two
But still the cheetah felt the strife
Between their points of view

Yet the cheetah must insist
As he pushes one last time
But the preys want to persist
Persists it's pressing mime

Stuck at opposite sides of fate
The cheetah and it's prey
Decide that maybe they can wait
And meet another day
Think while it's still legal.
2007-01-28, 11:00 AM #2
Nice. I don't like Cheetahs, though, so I just replaced it with a tiger in my mind.
"Häb Pfrässe, süsch chlepfts!" - The coolest language in the world (besides Cherokee)
2007-01-28, 1:43 PM #3
10 points to whoever figures out the poems meaning.
Think while it's still legal.
2007-01-28, 2:29 PM #4
a guy hitting on a girl
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2007-01-28, 2:37 PM #5
Awkward flow, good idea.
2007-01-28, 3:02 PM #6
Originally posted by Darkjedibob:
a guy hitting on a girl


That's part of it. 8 points.
Think while it's still legal.
2007-01-30, 12:59 PM #7
Guy hitting on a girl he likes and getting rejected due to conflicts.

I agree above. Flow could use some work, but good metaphorical representation and all.
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2007-01-30, 2:11 PM #8
Originally posted by zagibu:
Nice. I don't like Cheetahs, though, so I just replaced it with a tiger in my mind.


I replaced Cheetah with Cougar and Prey with Victor and suddenly the poem made much more sense.
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