RingMaster481's dirty poem reminded me of an old poem I wrote. Seeing as the Showcase forum has become the poetry forum of late, I might as well show this one off too. It's about a year old and it's nowhere near as dirty as RingMaster's poem. So hate it, love it, here it is...

[CENTER]Gel

The gel is in my hand for now,
But it's purpose is unknown.
Either way I'll eventually finish,
And in the end, something will be hard.

I should be raking it through my hair,
But today I'm feeling risky.
I feel like I should go to town,
Like I should keep it all for me.

Slowly dripping through my fingers
The clock is ticking and I can't decide.
My mind is telling me the right thing,
But I can't ignore my head.

I wish I had stopped to think,
Instead my thinking stopped.
I finally gave into temptation,
And went all the way to town.

My hair remains a limp pile,
But the gel has left my hand.
I eventually finished,
And in the end, something was hard.


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That was horrible.

Fap Fap Fap

Hehe. Gel.

Great, a poem about masturbation.

lol fap lol :downs:

Line 2, "it's" should be "its". Line 15, "into" should be "in to".


I'm not a fan of free verse myself, but the subject matter here certainly is entertaining. Might I suggest losing a little ambiguity and making it more, hehe, vivid. I find that when attempting humor through sexual innuendo in poetry one has to move beyond words like 'finish' and 'hard,' that is, words that in real life would provoke a 'that's what she said.' I think if you kept the use of 'hard' at the beginning and end but dug a little deeper in your vocabulary for the rest of it you could find some gold here.

That was awful. ****ing awful.

I think I just had a stroke.

(haha)