Great initiative there kirbs, I too am a big fan of Obama and what he stands for. I'm currently reading the
Audacity of Hope, which is giving me a profound look inside how this man's mind works and a great deal of insight into his potential to affect this nation.
I really think your letter is well-written and relevant, but I have a few minor suggestions:
In paragraphs 7-9, you mention how
These are all good, valid points; however you go on to say:
First of all, their actions are not irrelevant. Man's actions are the problem here or, rather, the misuse of their available actions. Also, when you say "it is their thinking . . . that bred the problem," this seems possibly contradictory to what you said earlier in regards to "no offensive idea has ever sinned" "Offensive ideas", whether they be the Ku Klux Klan, Nazi Germany, etc. have definately "sinned" or in less religious terms, caused misery and suffering. "Offensive idea" is too vague a term and personally, I think you should just cut it or at least revise it, because it lends little to the paragraph and seems awkwardly worded.
also:
This is a very odd sentence. I'm sure there is a more concise way of getting your point across. And "has bread men" should obviously be "bred."
As for the rest of letter, you raise many excellent points, and I commend you for getting this out there!